常规句：We can adopt all the good things. 突破句：We can adopt all the good things, both ancient and modern, Chinese and foreign. 译：我们可以吸收古今中外所有好的事物。 评：两组成对使用的形容词修饰good things, 凸显事物广泛来源，更加饱满生
常规句：We can adopt all the good things.
突破句：We can adopt all the good things, both ancient and modern, Chinese and foreign.
译：我们可以吸收古今中外所有好的事物。
评：两组成对使用的形容词修饰good things, 凸显事物广泛来源，更加饱满生动。
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现在分词短语作后置定语
常规句：A young man who sits comfortably in a chair says to himself...
突破句：A young man, sitting comfortably in a chair, says to himself...
译：年轻人舒服地坐在椅子上，自言自语……
评：现在分词短语代替who从句作后置定语，使句子避免堆砌之感，更加简洁生动。
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过去分词短语作后置定语
常规句：
A crop of new graduates who are faced with a career selection dilemma are wearing a puzzled look.
突破句：A crop of new graduates，faced with a career selection dilemma，are wearing a puzzled look.
译：一大群面临职业选择困境的新毕业生面带困惑的表情。
评：过去分词短语代替who从句作后置定语，使句子更具层次感，更能凸显毕业生困境。
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现在分词短语作伴随状语
常规句：One man is wearing a gloomy look. He covers his forehead and curses his luck.He is lamenting, “It’s all gone!”
突破句：Wearing a gloomy look, one man covers his forehead and curses his luck, lamenting, “It’s all gone!”
译：一人神情沮丧，怨声连连，手抚额头哀叹道：“全完了！”
评：两个现在分词短语作伴随状语，将原先的三句合为一句，简洁、准确、细致地勾画出图片人物的形象。
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过去分词短语作伴随状语
常规句：When teenagers are pressured by school work and encouraged by their peers, they often resort to pursuit of stars.
突破句：Pressured by school work and encouraged by their peers, teenagers often resort to pursuit of stars.
译：受学业的压力以及同伴的鼓动，年轻人往往会转向追星。
评：并列的过去分词短语替代原先的When从句作状语，简洁表明年轻人追星的两点原因，使随后的探讨方向更明确。
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With 结构作伴随状语
常规句：Two one-legged young men form a powerful union and run forward steadily. Their crutches are left behind and leaning upon each other.
突破句：Two one-legged young men form a powerful union and run forward steadily,with their crutches left behind and leaning upon each other.
译：两位各只有一条腿的年轻人形成强大的联合，稳健地奔向前方，他们的拐杖被留在身后相倚而立。
评：With 结构作伴随状语，将原来的两句合二为一，更能凸显画面两部分之间的联系，体现图画主题“合作”。
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What 从句作主语
常规句：The bright and confident smile on his face makes the boy exceptionally brilliant.
突破句：What makes the boy extraordinary is the bright and confident smile on his face.
译：使得这个男孩与众不同的是他脸上明亮自信的笑容。
评：What 从句作主语引出图片中男孩最值得关注的特征：(虽万般辛苦，但仍然)展现出阳光自信的笑容。
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状语前置倒装句
常规句：Their helpless old father crouches in the middle of the “football field ”.
突破句：In the middle of the “football field ” crouches their helpless old father.
译：蜷缩在足球场中间的是他们无助的老父。
评：地点状语前置，且主谓倒装用于描述图片，使图片描述更形象具体，更凸显“老父”的悲哀无助，引发读者关注与共鸣。
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名词结构作同位语
常规句：This drawing reflects a prevailing trend that various cultures can exist together and integrate with each other.
突破句：This drawing reflects a prevailing trend—the co-existence and integration of various cultures.
译：图片反映了当前的流行趋势——多种文化的共存与相融。
评：名词同位语替代that同位语从句对a prevailing trend进行解释说明，使表述更简洁干脆，且更能契合图片形象。
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which 引导的非限制性定语从句
常规句：As time spent on the Internet is on the rise, facetoface communication has experienced a rapid drop. That may result in feelings of distance and isolation.
突破句：As time spent on the Internet is on the rise, facetoface communication has experienced a rapid drop, which may result in feelings of distance and isolation.
译：随着上网时间的增加，人们面对面的交流在急剧减少，这可能会导致情感疏远和隔阂。
评：两句合为一句，使用which引导的非限制性定语修饰整个主句，说明主句内容的影响，使逻辑关系更明确，更突出网络的“远”。
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双重否定结构传递强调语气
常规句：Everybody’s success depends on his ability to remain optimistic in the face of adversity.
突破句：There is hardly a person whose success does not depend on the ability to remain optimistic in the face of adversity.
译：几乎没有一个人的成功不取决于面对逆境时保持乐观的能力。
评：本句使用双重否定对同一对象进行两次否定，以加强肯定语气，凸显“乐观”的重要性。
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倒装句式强调“必要条件”
常规句：Youngsters can become kind, calm and strong individuals by accumulating selfconfidence and experiencing challenges with it.
突破句：Only by accumulating selfconfidence and experiencing challenges with it can youngsters become kind, calm and strong individuals.
译：只有通过累积自信并靠其经历挑战，年轻人才能成为友好、冷静、强大的个体。
评：借助倒装句式Only...can...形成必要条件关系，突出强调“累积自信并靠其经历挑战”对年轻人的重大意义。
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It is... that ...句式强调条件、主体等
常规句：White pollution can be reduced when people voluntarily refuse to use plastic bags.
突破句：It is only when people voluntarily refuse to use plastic bags that white pollution can be reduced.译：只有人们自愿拒绝使用塑料袋，白色污染才能减轻。
评：本句使用It is only when... that...强调句结构，突出减轻白色污染的条件，暗中表明作者强烈建议。
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It is high time/critical time that...虚拟句式发起强烈倡议
常规句：We should adopt the wisdom of “Many hands make light work” to build a harmonious and competitive society.
突压做研破线对货句：It’前革s high time that we should adopt the wisdom of “Many hands make light work” to build a harmonious and competitive society.
译：现在正是这样的时刻：我们应吸取“人多力量大”的智慧，建立和谐强大的社会。
评：It’s high time that句式去掉了We should...的俗套，增加了呼吁的效果。
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比较结构 (as...as..., the same...as; much more... than...)凸显“共性”或“差异”
常规句：It is important to get in touch with others through the Internet. It’s also important to have facetoface communication
突破句：It is as important to have facetoface communication as to get in touch with others through the Internet.
译：面对面交流与通过网络与人交流一样重要。
评：使用同级比较as...as，从人们关注的“网络交流的重要性”引出作者强调的“面对面交流的重要性”，使观点客观明确，且更有说服力。
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排比反问句式传递作者强烈态度
常规句：If there is no love, we can’t be hopeful and energetic individuals, we can’t be kind and helpful to others, and we can’t join together to make a competitive nation.
突破句：Without love, how can we be hopeful and energetic individuals? Without love, how can we be kind and helpful to others? Without love, how can we join together to make a competitive nation?
译：没有爱，我们如何成为充满希望和精力的个体？没有爱，我们如何会对他人友好相助？没有爱，我们如何能够联合起来打造一个强国？
评：本句排比反问形成语气递进叠加，强调“爱”之于个人、他人、国家的重要性。
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比喻修辞使论述生动且有力
常规句：Chasing stars is spreading quickly among youngsters.
突破句：Chasing stars is an infectious disease, spreading quickly among youngsters.
译：追星是一种传染病，在年轻人中快速传播。
评：暗喻A is B 将追星比喻为传染病，暗中表明作者否定态度，并形象描绘其蔓延趋势。
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对比对照(A is to B as C is to D; Just as...(so)...)使论证深入且易懂
常规句：Vitamin D is indispensable to the body. Similarly, idleness is as indispensable to the brain.
突破句：Idleness is as indispensable to the brain as vitamin D is to the body.
译：闲暇于大脑就像维生素D于身体一样不可或缺.
评：本句以A is to B as C is to D结构形成类比，借助“维生素D对于身体的不可或缺”凸显“闲暇对于大脑的不可或缺”。
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